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Essay Prompt>
>Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience to support your opinion.
Sample Essay by Jeenn Lee Hsieh
Introduction>(narrowing the scope of the essay topic) from the general to the specific
1. Thesis statement (which presents your position to answer the essay question)
>While there are some benefits to getting a job straight after high school, it is usually better to go to college or university.
2. Focus (on specific reasons or ideas)
>For different reasons, teenagers face the dilemma of whether to get a job or continue their education.
3. Signposts A and B (which reveal the topic sentence A for Body A, and the topic sentence B for Body B.
>However, in pursuing a successful career in today's workplace, young people who start working instead of continuing their higher education are likely to be disadvantaged.
Body A>(Developing) Signpost A
4. Topic Sentence A
>On the one hand, the option to work straight after school is attractive for several factors.
5. Explanation
>In fact, an academic degree alone does not guarantee a person's career success in terms of personal income.
6. Example
>That is probably why some young people want to start earning money as soon as possible.
7. Details
>In this way, they can become independent, and they will be able to afford their own house or start a family.
8. Example
>Furthermore, young people who decide to find work, rather than continue their studies, may progress more quickly without delay.
9. Details
>It is because they will have the chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen professions.
Body B>(Developing) Signpost B
10. Topic Sentence B
>On the other hand, it is more beneficial for students to continue their studies.
11. Explanation
>If nothing else, academic qualifications are required in many professions.
12. Example
>For example, it is impossible to become a doctor, teacher or lawyer without having the relevant degree.
13. Details
>As a result, university graduates have more access to better job opportunities, and they tend to earn higher salaries than those with few such qualifications.
14. Example
>Besides, the job market nowadays is increasingly competitive, and often there are hundreds of applicants for a desirable position in a company.
15. Details
>It is understandable that those who do not have a university degree will be unable to compete.
Conclusion>(extending the scope of the essay topic) from the specific to the general
16. Signpost A+Signpost B>
>In comparison, students are more likely to be successful in their careers if they continue their education beyond the high school level.
17. Focus>
>Given the choice, young people should be encouraged to study for an academic degree that can open more doors to their future professions.
18. Thesis
>When it comes to being more competitive in the workplace, there is nothing like going to a college or university. (Essay modeled after ielts-simon.com 谢振礼ielts360toefl@hotmail.com pigai zuowen )
