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IELTS Writing Task 2
Essay Topic: School Subjects
Essay by a student from Taiwan
Re-written by Jeenn Lee Hsieh
ielts360toeflhotmail.com
IELTS Writing Prompt:
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Schools should concentrate more on teaching academic subjects because they are of greater benefit to children in the future. Less importance should be given to non-academic subjects such as sports and music.
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience to support your opinion.
Sample Essay ielts360toefl@hotmail.com 谢振礼
It is generally agreed that children can benefit more in the future from learning academic subjects than non-academic subjects. As a typical rule, less school time should be given to non-academic subjects like physical education, arts, and music, and more school hours should be spent on such academic subjects as maths, physics, chemistry, biology, history, geography and language. However, this does not mean that non-academic subjects are not important at all, nor that such extra-academic courses should be removed from the syllabus so that students could concentrate entirely on academic subjects.
All factors considered, academic achievements surpass non-academic abilities in their influence particularly on children who are planning to have a higher education. It may be said that traditional subjects are routes to university, then to future careers. Maths and sciences are important for engineering and medicine, for example. Further, native language being essential, learning English as a foreign language is almost a must in a world increasingly being globalized. History, on the other hand, teaches students to understand the past and even help solve present and future problems. Likewise, learning geography will lead children to be aware of the planet and its features that have great impact on human beings.
Non-academic subjects are also important, curiously, at least for one academic reason. That is to say that non-academic subjects also matter to academic learning, especially as they relate to extra-curricular activities participated by students. It is a known fact that children with better academic success like sports, enjoy music and/or appreciate arts. And it has also been reported that more than half of high school students who took part in physical activities sponsored by schools happened to be mostly 'good' students . Based on the same report, about 40 percent and 25 percent who joined the music clubs or art clubs, respectively, performed at the better-than-the-average level academically. In short, non-academic subjects should not be removed from schools.
In conclusion, it is not that non-academic subjects are as important as academic subjects at school, but that non-academic subjects also play a valuable role. Schools should place much more emphasis on teaching academic subjects because they are of greater benefit to children in the future. One thing, however, is sure: non-academic subjects do no harm. (Essay re-written by Jeenn Lee Hsieh, ielts360toefl@hotmail.com 谢振礼 pigai zuowen)
IELTS Rubrics
>Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
>Give reasons for your answer and include any RELEVANT examples from your knowledge or experience to support your opinion.
1【狠】Strong>A strong essay is well focused, well organized, and well supported.
2【快】Fast>When writing a timed essay, speed is critical.
3【准】Relevant>The opinion or ideas must be to the point (and not off-topic).
1. 称得上【狠】的论说文具有强势的主题，结构，内容。主题有焦点，结构有组织，内容有支持。
2. 速度【快】才能适应考试时间的限制和字数的要求。想要达到速度的要求却是必须想好再写，佛则反而欲速则不达。
3. 论证逻辑而切题才算是【准】。做到有问必答;避免离题(答非所问)。
IELTS Sample Essays: (on request from a student from Hongkong and Thailand)
There is no standard essay as everyone has different opinions.
20120421 IELTS Writing Task 2 (China)--gedu
Topic: Present or Future
http://ielts.gedu.org/p/2807-1.html
20120614 IELTS Writing Task 2 (China)--xdf
Topic: Scientific Research
http://www.51pigai.com/ielts-essay/task2-20120614
